Print draft feedback and learner response

 Current approximate print grade: C

 

Feedback:

 

Front cover:

 

• Nice cover image but could you bring the eyes out a little more using Photoshop?
• It looks like the slogan is bigger than the title – is this a deliberate design choice?
• Thinking of the title – does it meet the brief of a mainstream music magazine? I guess EDM is pretty big so it can work but worth checking.
• Cover lines are well written but perhaps need checking in terms of positioning and in how they relate to the main image (usually only one cover line would link to the main image).
• Think about how much space/lines the cover lines take up.
• I like the secondary images but the design/cutout/circles need a little work.

 

Double-page spread feature/interview:

 

• The article is superb – so well written, perfect tone and style. I’m not surprised with so much work published online but it’s still worth pointing out. It’s perfect!
• The challenge now is to get the page design/layout to the same professional level as the writing. Firstly, think about the use of headline/subheading – it’s unclear currently.
• Column width inconsistent – and it’s not obvious which way you read it (generally you read a column top-to-bottom before moving to the next one).
• The cut-outs work really well but can you wrap the text around the image? This tutorial explains it better: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RCeULeg3dzo
• Try and add some professional touches to lift the overall design too – e.g. pull-out quotes.

 

Tour poster

 

• I really like the black and white design – it looks great.
• I like the back-to-back images too but I feel like you could make more of them?
• Text layout and font is the big area to work on for me – font choice, size, alignment… go back to your tour poster research and look at these areas in particular before submitting a final draft.
• You’ve included the Sony logo (which is fine) but do you also need to reference the sponsorship so it makes more sense why it’s there?

Three improvements: 

- Change front cover layout 

- Rearrange text on double spread

- Play around with the colour scheme and layout of my tour poster